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My brother birthday!!!

On the 5th of October it was my brother birthday the people who come to my brother birthday Me,Mum,Jay,Ben and Tyran. We went to 3 different places, MacDonald, the skate park and another park.

We got home for Auckland it was my brother birthday the first thing that we did was go to McDonald for lunch what i have at  McDonald I had a cheese burger and chips and then we play on the playground for a bit.It was full of little kids which was boring, but we could run around and play tag.

After we went to mcdonalds we went home to chill and had a cake and we had to go out. I can’t really remember what the cake was like, but I know I liked it.

Later that day went to a stake park in Riccarton. It is just a park where you can skate.  At the stake park we watched my brothers do stuff there. They were doing scooter tricks, they were pretty good at doing the tricks.  Me Mum and Jay were joking around, telling jokes and laughing at my brother falling of his scooter. He kept doing tricks and falling which made us laugh as he kept saying “that was a mean trick”.

Then we went to another park. This one had a stake park too, but was smaller than the other one as it had another playground in it. Then we went on the playground, I went on it this time. We stayed there for a bit and then went home and chilled.  

That was all we did for my brothers birthday. It was a fun day he enjoyed it because he got to go to the skate park, so he was happy.

Reflection:

I think that I created an interesting piece of writing because…I write a good story

For next time I could spend more time on…the ening

In my writing, I would like to improve...my wow words