The worst day ever (First Draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

• I will describe an event or series of events in chronological order.  
• My writing will be about a main idea and have a focused purpose.
• I will provide information about who, what, when, where, why, and how the event happened.
• My recount will show how I have reflected on personal experience.  
• I will include details that describe how I felt and what I thought.
• I will describe the event using my five senses.

First draft

            The worst Day ever

It’s a beautiful day in December in  south Africa I am out walk with my family  the sun is shining around  the river  is in south Africa    I am Happy. I am look for some food and water. We are stop for a  drink . aI feeting safe around my dad  he is the Lull for   hard  ofor buffalos and my mum is the over Lull of the hard for buffalos . Then we stop for a sit time because we get seol leg’s.

I was walking along the river  bank , I saw dad stop  in his tracks, I smell danger in the air Then I saw a pride of lions ,then my dad  said  run.  So we run  and the lion’s were running after me . The lions got  me and I lose control  then I fall in the then water  I  with a big splash   I am  feeling sracy .Then the lions are pull me out of the water . Then the crocodile  snap  my  tile  the lions  and crocodile  are have I tug war over me . Then the lions start eat  me  then I hear a big scream  then I saw the hard of buffalos.  Then my family safe me be by pocket   the lion's .  At last I am back with my family  and I am feeling  good .