amazing time out
What: go to the beach
When: Wednesday 1 week of the school Holiday
Where: summers beach
Where: summers beach
Who: me ,Ben ,tyran,jay and mum
Why:because mum and jay plan to
How: jay drive us there
One sun hot wednesday day on the 1 week of the school holiday me my two brothers ben and tyran ,jay and mum went to summers beach for a amazing time out from our house we arrived at the beach we get out for the car.
There was a pool and a beach we run to the pool we got
mum in the pool “mum said it too cold” then we went swimming for a long time. Then we got out for the cold pool then went to the beach we running away for jay next we went swimming in the beach.
We went in the car and went a playground i play spy on mum and jay after i spy we went to climb trees next we went have lunch for we have mcdonalds after we have lauch we went to the playground mum and jay come on the playground we play spy on the ben and tyran it was awesome play spy on ben and tyran.
We went to climb trees mum take photos of us in the trees one tree had a face on it. After climb trees we went for a long walk around the playground in we went for a long drive we had stop at mcdonalds to get drinks in we went jay’s dads house for 2 or 4 hours.
Then we went to the some playground this time we are play all together we play i spy and climb trees mum ever climb trees it was amazing time next we went to playground and play on it then my brothers play on the skatepark.
Then we went to the to shop and i got hair diy but it was 8 wash out the color was green then we went home a 1 hour to do my hair and then we leave home so we went to the beach for long time this jay in the water .
We took some photos in we went to get ice cream after the Ymm ice cream we went back in the cold water it was like an ice cold water but the it was hot but not to hot .
We went to jay friend's house for 2 hour she was awesome she gave us some food and a drink then we leave after at we went to timezone.
At timezone we play game after that went to get some food time was 6:00 so had kfc for tea then we to this park rock wall i climb it then we walk for 1 hour round this thing it was amazing then we went to the mall
Hey Kortney,
ReplyDeleteI love how you described what you did on that trip. I was only wondering who is Jay?, is he your cousin or stepdad or someone? Next time when you improve your writing I think a great learning tool for you to use would be the Read & Write app because then you would definitely be able notice some of the minor mistakes that you made in your story, you are missing some punctuation like commas and capital letters. That is all from me Kortney, keep up the great work. :)