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Monday, November 27, 2017

Photoshoot writing Draft

                                                     Photoshoot: Draft

Bob was in the car drive to his photoshoot of him workout and he was meet his wife there Bob  ariver and his wife  he  thinks that she not there he thinks that she is on her way but she is there her car is around the back so Bob walk inside meet the people that is do his photo.


There is about 10 people there then Hope and rose walks in and then they do there photoshoot  and they have a break but the time is 12:00 pm Bob said “ hurry up” then they back inside and that stuff is is gone.

Then they go outside and see that a car door was open so they call the cops and then the cops said “it is fake” so they go inside and hope stay outside she see someone out there so she calls Bob and Rose they go on the roof and see that it was Jim.


So Bob gets mad chased Jim and then they go inside and it is dark and the light goes on and the people there edited the photos and someone walks in and said “got you but you don’t know who I am” then Bob gots to to the guy and says “what are you doing I know who you are you are Jim” the guy goes “yes but i got everything you need” .


then they go on with the photoshoot and then the photoshoot is done the problem isn’t so Bob get home and his Wife and Hope then they go inside and Hope goes on the bathroom then she went in her bedroom then they went to the park for photo done.

Then they go back to the house to see that the door was open then they went in and see that someone was in there and they went into the bathroom  and Jim was in there and Bob said “GO AWAY” Jim said “NO I'M NOT BECAUSE YOU SOLD MY BROTHER”Bob said “NO I DIDN’T”.

Then Jim goes home Bob goes to the door there was a note then something happened Hope was gone a note was there it said I GOT HOPE FOR JIM so Bob went to Jim hose get hope back.

Then put something and Jim dies then bob and his family was happy forever.


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    1. To Korney:

      I love this piece of writing you have wrote also I liked how you have put paragraphs in your story. you might want to look back and re-read your story because I found that parts of the story didn't make sense Apart from that this is a wonderful piece of writing. I also liked how you have said "I got hope for jim"I thought that was funny im not sure why but I just thought that.

      From Kayla

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